Reading 07

Week 19

Reading 07


For this week's work, we will be looking at our peer's research for their written piece on the book we're writing for the end of the semester. For this, I will be looking at two of my classmate's research articles and analyzing them and how they could be helpful for the people who are reading them. I will also probably find new ways to improve my own work, this could help me with how I lay out my work in my next research documents.

Feedback:

For this feedback session, I had two guys called Tudor and David, I also had someone from my family review my work too. 
From the feedback I've gotten, it was a relief to see that my work is going in the right direction,m through most of my writings I would often look at my work and wonder if what im saying makes sense or if im going in the right direction since last week this feedback has reminded me that what im saying is making sense to readers. 
On the other hand, some of the feedback I was getting was concerning my intro and conclusions, I didn't really have anything to round off what I was talking about. This is the thing I need to complete my topic. Something to solidify in the reader's minds what I was talking about and why im talking about it. 
Having a conclusion using better language would be something I want to aim for when the final topic is done. I don't want to have the stereotypical conclusions where I say "In conclusion" and proceed to give a short summary of the whole writing, instead, I want to tie up all the ends for this work and leave nothing up in the air.
Another part of my essay that had a big impact on how it sounded to the readers was reflective writing. In my piece of work, I was told that I sound more reflective rather than the academic style that im trying to achieve. This is mainly due to the fact that on a couple of occasions I would bring in my own experiences with the subject rather than just saying what it is and instead of bringing it back to me bring it back to a source I've read on it instead.
This was really helpful to me as I didn't even notice I was doing it I think all these months of writing blog posts has me stuck in a reflective writing loop.


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